not bad but i think you should work on downtime in between clips and in general in the clips itself. in other words, instead of showing you peeking an angle for 5 seconds, cut like a second before your next kill. You forced your shots to be on beat, thats why in some of the clips, there would be nothing happening for 5 seconds, which is enough for anybody to get bored. If you reduce downtime, itll be faster paced, and more exciting to watch.
i have also seen some other fragmovie channels put some color correction and motion blur on the videos (most of those youtubers come from fortnite i think, where there it was some sort of aesthetic) which would, if done correctly, make the video look more pleasing.
one example would be subi (https://www.youtube.com/c/subi)