I have a yt competition

yall I found I have translating competition

my edg video:
https://youtu.be/N_XeRPlqLQ4?si=dwDwalvEnk-_FoOF
their edg video:
https://youtu.be/1h1N-r4KVNA?si=1sS693x_LoEjORJ-

Any tips to improve my video?
cuz lowkey I wanna do better but no hate to them

wanshunzhi is my goat u cant compete im sorry

idk mandarin but it seems like youre translating too directly compared to the other guy, you gotta smooth it out so its closer to how english would actually be used